User talk:Fabdoull/essay

LikesPickles, Germanboi87 and Amay1355 I just finished writing my essay. I'm sorry if some of you were waiting. Thanks for your understandingFabdoull (talk) 01:57, 26 November 2018 (UTC).

Essay Draft Review
I thought the draft was very sufficient with information and extremely well worded so my evaluation may seem a bit "nit-picky". I liked the usage of wiki links but I feel like the paragraphs stick together a bit on the page and could use some space between them or some sort of division. I found a couple of minor errors such as incorrect usage of the word do. Use Ctrl+F and search for "do". I found 2 incorrect uses of it or accidental placement of it. When you speak of being able to speak and write another language say you speak "in" French and cave requires no capital C when you mention your cave article that you translated. Otherwise, fantastic article. You speak very well! LikesPickles (talk) 05:59, 26 November 2018 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the review LikesPickles. "Nit-picky" evaluations are actually the best one can get from a peer because minor errors are sometimes the difference between average and great writing.Fabdoull (talk) 05:08, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

Essay Comments
The essay flows very well, however adding some paragraph indentations and sections would make it look cleaner. I found it was cool that you decided to translate a French article, because you speak French. That's so cool, and helps Wikipedia and people who cannot speak French. Your essay was very detailed, and included a lot of information that added to its flare. I agree with you when you said you enjoyed learning the behind the scenes part of Wikipedia, that definitely has to have been one of the coolest parts. The Wikilinks did help me learn of all of the things you contributed to Wikipedia, and I appreciate that. Over all, I enjoyed the essay, and cannot wait to read the article you do over Christmas break. Amay1355 (talk) 16:25, 26 November 2018 (UTC)


 * Amay1355 Thank you for the comments and happy you enjoyed the essay. I avoided putting sections because What I want with this essay is to share my experience on Wikipedia like a story in which I talk about each assignment and how I dealt with it. This way, i make it looks homogeneous which avoids me to fall in the trap of writing boring summaries in sections. I prefered incorporating all requirements on the guideline in my story. For indentations, its not possible on Wiki (One more reason to love this place). Hope you will enjoy Islamophobia in France when it is done.Fabdoull (talk) 04:57, 28 November 2018 (UTC)

The start of this essay is very good. I'd recommend changing the first sentence to sound more sure. It seems a little shaky and unsure. I appreciate how you go into detail about what you did, and what it meant to you in the copy edits. It is good that you edited things that are close to home, because there will be a little more emotion behind it. You were a little different than most of the editors in this class, because you speak two languages. It was good that you were able to translate the page on the cave, and that you enjoyed that more than creating an entirely new article. This essay overall is very good, and it shows how you really feel about the site. This will be a very good essay to turn in if you keep working at it.Jisbell2 (talk) 17:54, 26 November 2018 (UTC)


 * Jisbell2, I agree with you for the first sentence. Definitely something I have to change. Thank you for the review. Appreciate your comments!Fabdoull (talk) 05:03, 28 November 2018 (UTC)