User talk:FacetiousLobster/sandbox

Peer review:
Zyxcba123 (talk) 16:48, 30 March 2018 (UTC)
 * there should be a comma after large
 * refer to the compound as "Pc" - is that the same as H2Pc? Perhaps should always be referred to as H2Pc
 * "affords the molecule useful properties" seems like an opinion - useful for who?
 * "Many phthalocyanine compounds are thermally very stable, do not melt but can be sublimed" - insert an "and" between stable and do instead of a comma
 * solubility could be linked to a another Wikipedia articles, as could substitution/substituted and ubsubstituted
 * "changing the color from pure blue to green to colorless" could be chAnged to "changing color from pure blue or green to colorless"
 * above figures under "Synthesis" section - missing the "than" between synthesized and H2Pc
 * when making claims about the importance of something or using words like "greater" or "enormous" make sure there is evidence to back it up or take out those filler words altogether to keep it from seeming opinionated
 * last sentence in Applications sentence is missing the word 'to' before the word 'form'
 * looks like there are a few sections missing citations (we talked about this in person) so be sure to go and cite claims made

P e e r r e v i e w

 * Looks like you doubled the number of citations. Good work.


 * Maybe you could get a picture of the solar cells or something, just a nice visual aid


 * Maybe expand on "Halogenated and sulfonated derivatives of copper phthalocyanines are commercially important."


 * don't forget to put in the reaction mechanism


 * Overall good, did not find any bad sentences

Elcquid (talk) 16:56, 30 March 2018 (UTC)