User talk:Farreled/sandbox

Looks goodDwyersa (talk) 15:52, 22 October 2018 (UTC)

Good Balance of Topics
I like that your sections seem pretty balanced and have a good amount of information. Especially the balance of information between sections.

You might consider trying to put the sections in chronological order. I'm not actually sure either because the bombing of hamburg section says "During the last week of July in 1943..." while the attack in Norway section says "On July 24th..." The only issue I see with this is the possibility of not being able to put it in chronological order because one took place over a week and one took place in a day. If this is true, it could be a good idea to add information to each individual day of the bombing of hamburg and organize it like that too, unless of course there isn't much of a difference between each day.

I would make these minor edits to the Bombing of hamburg article as well:

During the last week of July in 1943, The United States Army Air Forces(USAAF) launched an offensive against Germany in the form of air raids in which 1,000 combatants were either killed, injured, or *Add went* missing[4]. The United States of America *Delete had* launched these air raids along side the United Kingdom, which *Replace with The Countries* called Operation Gomorrah. Hamburg was deemed an important strategic target due to its housing of U-boats and oil refineries in the region. *Replace with Because of* the fact that the Nazis knew and understood the importance of Hamburg, the city was rigged with anti-aircraft weapons and 1,700 shelters were provided for its 230,000 citizens[5]. To counter the radar use in Hamburg, British bomber crews applied strips of tin foil, known as Chaff, to the bomber which would be dropped to confuse the radar screen and would appear as a cluster of targets on the screen. Britain's first attack came on the 24th, with the USAAF to follow the next day, in which they sustained heavy losses. The USAAF had originally planned to have 300 bombers to hit Hamburg, but only 90 were able to make it, so they were forced to scale back the attack[6].