User talk:Fchu6/sandbox

I love your use of hyperlinks, it is really helpful for the reader. The first paragraph on Mortimer is super informative and concise. Under his main contributions to cognitive science I like that you explained what his contributions were but didn't go into too much depth because the paper is about him and not so much his research. Good use of headings and subheadings, although I would consider bolding the heading and not the subheadings. There were various sources cited and you used more than one per topic. I don't think there is anything that needs to be changed. It was easy to read and it flowed very well and I did not notice any grammatical or spelling errors. Not sure if the picture of Mortimer is cited or not but if it isn't that would be the only thing you should fix. Overall, excellent paper. I enjoyed reading it!

-Geraldine

I found this article to be very informative, concise and easy to understand. I liked how the first few sections on his academics and career were concise but listed the main achievements and research. It was very interesting to learn that he was supervised by Donald Hebb himself! I also like the sections on his past and current research. The headings and subheadings made it easy to distinguish. Under the "Where vs. What" section of research I found the links, especially for the brain vary helpful. It would be nice for those who were not familiar if there was a general picture showing the frontal, occipital, parietal and temporal lobes of the brain, of course this is not completely necessary as the links have diagrams on their pages. I also thought that a brief description of how lesion studies works to help us identify which areas are responsible for what function, might help the reader to understand Mishkin's research better. Generally the research was very well explained and easy to understand with many useful links. There was only one grammatical error I noticed, there is no 's needed after 'Ungerleider' under the "Where vs. What" section of research. Overall I loved the work you've done, very well written and informative.

SalKhan7 (talk) 22:46, 1 April 2013 (UTC)

Geraldine, Thank you for your comments. I did not go into too much depth about his contributions because a lot of his research investigate mechanisms at the physiological level which may be too complex for students without a background in physiology to understand. The bolding is built-in with the Wikipedia subheadings. The picture of Mishkin is taken from a US gov domain under Wiki Commons.

Salkhan7, Thank you for your feedback. I did not include a brief description of lesion studies because that would fall under the topic of lesion. In response to your suggestion though, I linked the word lesion to the page "lesion" to aid in readers' understanding. I also corrected the grammatical error you pointed out. Fchu6 (talk) 05:14, 7 April 2013 (UTC)