User talk:Fefost/sandbox

Maya's Peer Review
A big thing to work on is citing your sources. Where can we find this information? Who wrote about the shift in interest to wedding gowns during the 20th century? Where did you get the information about Hayley Page? Citations help.

There are a few grammar errors in the two bodies of text, mostly consisting of sentence structure errors and spelling mistakes. I recommend proof reading your text at least twice in order to correct these errors.

After reading for a while, the way the sentences are structured, especially towards the end, make the work sound like you are trying to convince the reader about the purity of wedding dresses. While this may not be the case, actually stating the name of certain groups or people who believed in this ideology will help back up your claims and keep your statements neutral. Maya Moreno (talk) 08:22, 24 May 2019 (UTC)