User talk:Felicsmith/sandbox

Hey, my name is Ivy!

Peer Review: I think you have good and interesting information to add, I like that you added the example of Ron Paul to backup your information, just be sure to add citations. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Ivydellis (talk • contribs) 03:58, 19 March 2018 (UTC)

Mvhayv's Peer Review: Good topic! Need to check grammar but good for the most part. Good examples but would like more. Did good when refering to the sources. Would like more information about YouTube and it's effects though. Mvhayvh (talk) 15:33, 27 March 2018 (UTC) Mvhayvh

Peer Review Response to Mvhayv: Thanks for the good advice! I've definitely checked over my grammar again and made some changes. I will for sure take your suggestions into consideration and work on adding to my draft. Felicsmith (talk) 20:24, 5 April 2018 (UTC)

Article Draft
Felicity,

You have some good information in your draft. There are some grammatical errors, however. Also, the information about Ron Paul should have a reference. I'm also not sure the phrase "remain relevant" is not biased. Less biased language would may say that it allowed him to remain in the race--many might disagree that he was relevant. Otherwise, very good addition. JAirhart 12:26, 23 March 2018 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Airhartcomp (talk • contribs)
 * By the way, your sources cannot be located based on the information you provided. Ebsco links are not permanent.JAirhart 12:29, 23 March 2018 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Airhartcomp (talk • contribs)