User talk:Fhines

Amerigroup
I don't understand why you removed the cleanup tags from this article. The article, and especially the lead, is written in marketing bullshit and says almost nothing meaningful. I tried to translate it to English myself, but couldn't so I tagged it for cleanup.

Please read this essay, then reread the introduction of Amerigroup. You might also read about conflict of interest. I don't know, but I assume from your writing style that you work in Amerigroup's public relations department. If so, you might want to declare you conflict of interest and/or avoid editing the article directly.

I've restored the tags and added a comment on the talk page detailing exactly what needs cleaning up. Kilopi (talk) 21:32, 15 March 2012 (UTC)

Explanation of my edits
Some of your recent edits to Amerigroup were improvements. Below is an explanation of why I reverted the parts that weren't.

Re PPI: I could find no credible outside sources about this group and suspect it is not a sufficiently important part of Amerigroup's operations. In any case, the wording in not neutral. If it is to be described as "innovative" or "helpful", then there must be an independent source calling it such, not just a press release.

Re NAB: "The NAB consists of members with disabilities; children of aging parents; parents of children and adults with disabilities; and sisters, brothers, spouses, children and friends of people with disabilities." Come on. Do you even know somebody who doesn't fall into at least one of those categories? I'm in 2 of them and if that makes me a prime candidate for filling the next vacancy, then there the board is definitely irrelevant.

I'm reverting to describing it as "made up of 19 community advocates, health care experts and academics" which suggests the board might be sufficiently informed for someone to care what they think. While ideally we'd have an independent source for these credentials, no one seems to dispute it so I left it in.

Volunteerism: The text you added here is not neutral and the source is not reliable. I'm reverting it.

Awards: This is not a trophy case. Let me know if you can find a newspaper article that says, "Amerigroup, the state's largest manager of Medicare plans and winner of the Web Health Gold Award for iPad use, met with city officials on Monday to discuss moving their datacenter into the site of the newly closed Fulton Elementary School." Basically, if nobody else cares about an award, then Wikipedia doesn't either. I'm removing this section again, because with sources attesting the significance of the awards, it just looks like attempts at promotion.

Social links: WP:ELOFFICIAL recommends minimizing the number of official links. The Facebook and Youtube links can be removed since readers can find them on Amerigroup's homepage. Kilopi (talk) 10:32, 5 March 2013 (UTC)