User talk:Fiestadenise/sandbox

Denise, Under the abstract it might flow better if you put the second paragraph in the signs and symptoms portion. I liked that you added the portion under causes that described the difference between a short and long arm of a chromosome to help the readers better understand how this is caused. Under pathology you mention what tests should be done to detect this disorder but it would also be helpful if you included what the abnormal findings would come up as, if applicable or if every case is different. Under the treatment portion you could also include an example of what a potential treatment plan is for someone even if every case is different. Also, a picture could be beneficial to either show on which chromosome this takes place or to see the signs on a patient who is experiencing this. Overall, I think your wiki page looks great and it is very easy to follow along! I was able to learn a lot of information that I had not known about previously. --Mgauthi (talk) 20:16, 14 November 2019 (UTC)

--Sweiner02 (talk) 18:12, 30 November 2019 (UTC)
 * Chromosome 6 is not the same thing as trisomy 6q. Be clear on your phrasing.
 * This needs some work to be easily readable and flow clearly.
 * All sections need citations.
 * Some parts of this are directly copied from other websites. That is plagiarism, and any section with more than one full sentence of direct copying will receive 0 credit and likely be removed by wikipedia. If you are struggling with proper paraphrasing, come get help.
 * The stuff in your mechanism section is diagnosis, not mechanism.
 * Treatment is pretty vague. Needs more info.
 * Discuss and cite recent research. There is some.