User talk:FilmIsGreat

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Hello, FilmIsGreat, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Peer Review
This page is quite good, as there’s plenty of in depth information and many reliable sources. Due to there being quite a bit of information the page does indeed look jumbled in some places, and the aesthetics of the page aren’t consistent throughout. The only thing I can think of is perhaps making the headings and subheadings more clear and concise. Adding a “Career,” subheading (1) and then adding the sections “As a director,” and “As an actress,” as separate subheadings. Also, there are several paragraphs with absolutely no citations, so the page would benefit from those being added. Other than this, and some other small formatting issues, the article is fantastic. Southerngothics (talk) 01:47, 4 November 2019 (UTC)

Peer Review
Your additions to this article are great. You have added plenty of relevant information that speaks to Labaki's early life, and your section on the themes of her work is very informative. Underlining your contributions in your sandbox also made it easy to determine what has been added. I would suggest you search for any grammatical errors still present in your sandbox before moving it to the mainspace, and look for instances of repeated information, or sentences that would benefit from being condensed. For example: "Having a childhood occurring during the Lebanese Civil War, Labaki had seen many examples of violence, which is often a main theme in her works.[2] Labaki's films are inspired by her experiences of political unrest in her country, as well as traumatic memories of the Lebanese Civil War. [2]" While this information is certainly relevant, both sentences are essentially saying the same thing. I would also suggest, when using information obtained from an interview, to make it clear that this information is coming from Labaki herself. All in all, you've done a great job here! Stormont458 (talk) 19:15, 5 November 2019 (UTC)Stormont458