User talk:Filmstudent3301A/Neema Barnette Biography

Peer Review
The biography you have written in your sandbox is clear and concise, albeit some small grammatical errors. Take this sentence for example: "She started directing kids in the city in plays to help their reading skills, but before pursuing directing, Barnette was an actress in Vinette Carroll's prestigious 'Urban Arts Corps'.[4]" There are a few grammatical errors and issues in sentence structure with this quotation alone. It may be that you are trying to cover too much information too quickly. I would suggest ending a sentence before moving on to another aspect of Barnette's career, when applicable. Try not to use the same word more than once in a sentence. I know it is inevitable in some cases, but for example: "She started directing kids in the city in play to help their reading skills" may sound better as "Bernette began directing local children in New York City plays, to help improve their reading skills." The names of films, television shows, plays, etc. should be italicized rather than written in full caps. When referencing famous institutions or individuals, you can link those names to other Wikipedia pages in your text. I would suggest creating a chart for Bernette's filmography. Another issue you may have with this draft is moving it to the mainspace, as large portions of the information provided are sourced to iMDB. While I understand there is a vast amount of easily accessible information on this website, you will not be able to move any of your work to the mainspace if it is not backed up by a reliable source. iMDB is not an academic publication, anyone can update the site with information (reliable or otherwise), so I hope you are able to find a more trusted publication to back up your research. Good luck on your assignment. - Stormont458 (talk) 21:31, 4 November 2019 (UTC)Stormont458