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Maureen's Peer Review
Brittany --

Very interesting topic! It will be interesting to see the final result with the enumerated types of mutilation(s). Are you planning to look at different states within Africa or a particular region? I noticed you have Sierra Leone so maybe a comparative analysis of Sierra Leone and other regions would be interesting. If it's too broad, you might think of comparing Northern Africa to Southern Africa. Also, what are the purposes of the mutilations? When did they originate (pre or post-colonialism)?

Good luck with your research! I can't wait to read the final product.

Erin's Peer Review
Brittany,

I am thrilled you are covering FGM and giving it more visibility within the Sierra Leone Wikipedia page as this is a serious human rights issue that affects females throughout the world.

The opening sentence should be a loose definition of FGM and a background of its usage before delving into the health effects. In the background before health effects a cultural/societal context as to why FGM is happening and perhaps whether it is more prevalent within certain regions, religions, ethnic groups, or whatever other variable or combination of variables. Also, in the health effects section- why Type I and Type II are more prevalent than the two other types of FGM or what demographics utilize which method more frequently and why.

Other than that, you seem to be on the right track and I know this will be an interesting read! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Eotoole415 (talk • contribs) 04:01, 7 April 2019 (UTC)