User talk:Fionnloch

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Your submission at Articles for creation: Draft:Monstrous Regiment Theatre Company (July 23)
 Your recent article submission to Articles for Creation has been reviewed! Unfortunately, it has not been accepted at this time. Please read the comments left by the reviewer on your submission. You are encouraged to edit the submission to address the issues raised and resubmit when they have been resolved. . Thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia! Cerebellum (talk) 13:05, 23 July 2014 (UTC)
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Monstrous Regiment
Hello there! Thank you for your note on my talk page. You are spot-on with your identification of the phrasing issues - really the three phrases you mentioned are the only problematic ones. I recommend replacing "resolved" and "incensed" with some other word and either removing the bit about "women’s lives and experiences were placed centre-stage" or, if a lot of people describe the company that way, making it a quote. We just can't have that line in Wikipedia's voice. I'm sorry if I threw you off with that message about advertising, I think it would have been more apt to just say that some bits of the article are non-neutral in tone. If you make those corrections the article should be ready for article-space. Let me know when you resubmit it and I'll take another look. --Cerebellum (talk) 21:41, 28 July 2014 (UTC)

Your submission at AfC Monstrous Regiment Theatre Company was accepted
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