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Mollie Wilson’s Peer Edit on Claudia’s article
- Difficult flow of grammar in the second sentence, first paragraph. - Provide examples of alternative humanitarian organizations trying to intervene with Yemen or more extensive analysis on their efforts. - Provide more detail on which cities or regions that have been affected by the violent acts. - Second paragraph has good, detailed analysis of the article, including many useful facts to the subject of health in Yemen. Mollie louiseee (talk) 22:05, 18 October 2018 (UTC) mollie_louiseee

Thank you for your feed back, i will try to add some more examples and what they have done specifically. I will also try to add more about the regions. Fioreclaudia (talk) 23:07, 18 October 2018 (UTC) Fioreclaudia

Rowens Peer review
-I think this is a great intro to health care in Yemen. -It explains well why they are not getting access, with statistics. -I think the source your using is reliable and in the right place. -why was there already a collapse of health care, maybe write one to two sentences about that. -"however, do to" in that sentences change "do" to "due" -provide more detail about the area that are being effected and how they are being effected. -Overall great start and really informative! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Rowenlochnicht (talk • contribs) 23:15, 18 October 2018 (UTC)