User talk:Flandre529/sandbox

Since her topic was unique, Flandre's sandbox seemed very interesting. She put the pictures to provide a better understanding of her topic. I feel like it is incompleted, however, it was a good explanation. I wish it would be better if she explains the plot in the beginning so the audience is able to possess background knowledge while reading her sandbox. Furthermore, it would be better if she organizes the order. There is content however no plot or any explanations, so it was hard to understand her purpose of the writing. Moreover, the title says cultural influences, but the paragraph just explains how the story was popular, therefore, I was to know how the performance was effective to other people or the whole country of China. Other than these few problems, I think it is a very interesting topic and I would like to see the final version of it.

Some Sugggestions
Hi Flandre, Below are some of my suggested inputs: 1). "contents" does have to be part of the content list, try to move the items up there? 2). The "]" at the beginning of every section is kind of odd 3). More sources are definitely needed, you might want to cite the same source multiple times just to show where your information came from so people won't change anything. I think at least one source per sentence is needed. 4). If you reference though "cite" the citation will be automatically generated. --Kaitlyntian (talk) 18:30, 19 October 2019 (UTC)