User talk:FlowerrGirl/Education in Vietnam

To start off, I don't think your first source is open access. When I tried to access the full text, you either had to log in through and institution or pay almost $40 for it. Because of this, I don not think you can use it as one of your sources. The same thing goes for your second source. Also, your first and third sources are the same source, along with your second and fourth. Moving past that, I think you should be inserting citations into your addition more frequently than you have been doing. You are not really supposed to go more than two sentences without a source cited at the end. In the first sentence, I got confused at "during the recent year." I feel like you need to clarify this for the reader. Does that mean 2020? 2019? Multiple years? Also, the last word of the first paragraph, what is "it" referring to? In the second paragraph, "Vietnam set themselves for a much better system shortly" does not make sense to me. Perhaps I am reading it incorrectly, but I feel the average reader would make the same mistake from me, so maybe some clarification would help. I thought your third paragraph was pretty solid. I also noticed a few weird grammar errors throughout. The biggest takeaway for me is the sources, so if you can find some new open access ones, you should be better off! --Ewizard123 (talk) 21:14, 2 December 2020 (UTC)

So for the sources if you use the same source twice you don't have to add it in as a new source you can just simply reuse the one already used, so you should be able to get rid of the third and fourth source in the bibliography. Second, the sources you used can't be accessed unless you pay or access them through an institution, so you may want to find new sources to use. Lastly, some of the parts could be seen as opinions because they don't have a source to back them up such as the first paragraph and the last part of the second so you might want to put a source by those to make it a fact. JakeBrooks2 (talk) 23:25, 2 December 2020 (UTC)