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Updated
Just updated a page I submitted and that you declined to include more reliable and unbiased sources. I'd love for you to check it out and let me know if there are any specifics you think I should change in order to improve the quality of the page titled "Jeff Yarbro". Thank you. Thetbayers (talk) 20:44, 23 July 2014 (UTC)Thetbayers

Lactobacillus paracasei update
Hello, I reviewed your comments on my students' draft of the Lactobacillus paracasei page, and used that information to update the stub. I hope this will be satisfactory. Thank you for your review!

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Lactobacillus_paracasei

Jcammm (talk) 19:16, 12 August 2014 (UTC)

Precious
  kind cleanup

Thank you for quality articles on Gastropods, for tireless creation of articles with proper templates, such as Sphingopyxis italica, for excellent copy-editing, wikification, backlog elimination, looking at articles for creation, and for kindness, - you are an awesome Wikipedian!

--Gerda Arendt (talk) 06:42, 25 August 2013 (UTC) A year ago, you were the 585th recipient of my  Pumpkin Sky Prize, --Gerda Arendt (talk) 20:12, 25 August 2014 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much! I appreciate your kind words. Wishing you well, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 20:39, 25 August 2014 (UTC)

Article on Jens Beckert, sociologist
Dear FoCuSandLeArN,

I'm writing to you as a staff member of the Max Planck Institute for the Study of Societies in Cologne, Germany. In December 2013 we posted an entry about one of our directors, Jens Beckert, which was declined by you due to missing references which mark Jens Beckert's notability. We therefore amended his entry in June. Apart from minor changes (e.g. link corrections) we wait for its publication.

I know that you have lots to do and many sites to correct, but would it be possible to check our new proposal in the next few days? That'd be great!

Thanks a lot and all the best from Cologne Silvia

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Article
I have created an article but its still an article for creation .How long does it takes to be published on wikipedia as an real article? — Preceding unsigned comment added by GersaB (talk • contribs) 20:54, 12 September 2014 (UTC)
 * You have to wait till it's reviewed, which can take several weeks. If it is approved, it will be moved to the main Wikipedia. Regards, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 14:07, 19 September 2014 (UTC)

A kitten for you!
Thanks for telling me how to improve my article.

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20:13:28, 28 September 2014 review of submission by Htirgan
Hello:

I submitted an article, "Keloid Disorder". It was rejected on grounds that the article "Keloid" does exist and I should simply improve that. Before I wrote my article, I did exactly what you had suggested, but the owner, or the original author of that article rejected my edits. The edit history is there and you can verify his actions.

The are many issues with the "keloid article" but the biggest issue is the owner of it. He simply does not posses the medical knowledge, neither does he have the command of English. Please read his first paragraph and you will know. The proper title for this topic is "Keloid Disorder"

Secondly, I am a physician, specializing in treatment of Keloid. I have treated over 800 patients with this illness, I research this condition, and I do posses the expertise to revise or write on this topic, and the person who authored "Keloid" has simply copied and pasted material in his wiki write up.

In any event, I was just trying to improve wiki.

Michael H. Tirgan MD

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Page Declined
I would like your recommendations to correct the causes for this page being declined: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia_talk:Articles_for_creation/Bobby_McKeown#Biography

The challenge with providing more supporting information is that the majority of the information predates the internet, so there are not a lot of links to connect to for references.

Thank you for your time. it is appreciated.

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Article on Jens Beckert
Dear FoCuSandLeArN,

I know that you're quite busy and already responded to my question about Jens Beckert's article. But do you know how long it might still take until it's going to be published? I saw that you liked my improvement ;-) Thanks a lot for a short answer!

Best

Silvia — Preceding unsigned comment added by MPIfG (talk • contribs) 12:57, 2 October 2014 (UTC)

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Almark
Hello, I have recently added 'notable' sources to Almark [artist] page, please review them. These include a showcase to Deviant Magazine [a notable source] as well as Yeah I know It sucks Reviews. The last review was May 2014. Thank you. Draft:Almark — Preceding unsigned comment added by SynthoElectro (talk • contribs) 04:38, 31 October 2014 (UTC)

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Questions
How do I remove "draft" from the subject? How do I add & upload related articles? 14:33, 2 December 2014 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure I understand your questions. Could you please elaborate? Regards, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 14:33, 2 December 2014 (UTC)

A request
Hi FoCuSandLeArN. Would you mind dropping me an email when you have a moment, please? I have something to discuss with you that I'd prefer to keep off your talkpage for the time being. Yunshui 雲 水 11:46, 5 December 2014 (UTC)

07:40:14, 9 December 2014 review of submission by 94.211.2.68
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DEAR,

MARWAN KENZARI IS AN ESTABLISHED ACTOR IN THE NETHERLANDS. HE ALREADY HAS A DUTCH WIKIPEDIA PAGE.

PLEASE ADVISE WHAT I NEED TO EDIT TO SUBMT THE ENGLISH WIKIPEDIA PAGE?

REGARDS, AMRITA PANDAY

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Contributions
Hi,

Thanks for the positive feedback on my article for Russell P. Hartle. I have created a draft page for Vance Havner and that submission was declined. I have begun the re-write and would appreciate your help to get it ready for approval.

Thanks,

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Altered speedy deletion rationale: Yonder (software)
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Submission Declined
I am checking in on this article: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:The_Seven_Elements_of_High_Performance

Can you provide more details on why it wasn't accepted? This is a model that has been used by multiple organizations and has been addressed in a published book by Gary Lear.

Thanks,

Matthew Michael — Preceding unsigned comment added by 68.101.47.252 (talk) 19:04, 24 February 2015 (UTC)
 * I'm afraid it seems like a direct copy from the cource material. As such, it's against Wikipedia's copyright policies. Also, it seems to be inadequate. FOr more information please see WP:NOT. Regards, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 21:45, 24 February 2015 (UTC)

February 2015 Wikification awards!
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regarding my declined Ronald Weinberg Article
Hi,

Thanks for your advice, it helped me.

I will not need to have the article posted finally.

I think it is better to let the justice system follow it's due course and then create an article.

Though I'm a little concerned to find that only the deceased wife of this husband-and-wife team gets to have a page.

I find that a little strange.

Thank you for your time.

Maxime Côté Québec, Canada soooo cold! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Maxime Côté (talk • contribs) 20:11, 6 March 2015 (UTC)

Don't sweat it,really it's not very important anymore. be excellent and have a nice day FoCuSandLeArN. peace out. Max — Preceding unsigned comment added by Maxime Côté (talk • contribs) 05:31, 7 March 2015 (UTC)

19:28:55, 10 March 2015 review of submission by ATomNAM
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Hi @FoCuSandLeArN! I didn't see a "sandbox" option under the National Arbitration and Mediation page itself, I only noticed one under my username. Would you be able to assist me by providing more information as to how I can improve the quality of the submission to conform with wikipedia's standards and guidelines? I have revised the content to make it neutral but I don't want to submit it and have it taken down without receiving input from a respected moderator. Thank you for your time and I hope to hear back from you soon! ATomNAM (talk) 19:28, 10 March 2015 (UTC)ATomNAM

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Meharry-Vanderbilt Alliance
I've added two additional references that directly reference the Alliance. One is an in-depth case study of it. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mattschorr (talk • contribs) 18:29, 5 May 2015 (UTC)

23:53:21, 5 May 2015 review of submission by Bjoyce1
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I've done what I was told to do by different Wikipedia contributors and still this article is not accepted. The sources are reliable. What am I doing wrong? Bjoyce1 (talk) 23:53, 5 May 2015 (UTC)
 * He is simply non-notable at this time, according to Wikipedia's notability guidelines. FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 01:38, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

Perquisite artist page
Hi FoCuSandLeArN! Thank you so much for wanting to help with the article page and your specific comment. You're exactly what I need, I kinda got stuck. You told me to provide some chart information about the artist I'm writing about (Perquisite, from Amsterdam). I just noticed that two of his studio albums actually already have their own English wikipedia page:

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mindstate_(Pete_Philly_and_Perquisite_album) https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mystery_Repeats

On this website you can see that 1. 'Mystery Repeats' album held the second position in the Dutch charts for 25 weeks. > http://dutchcharts.nl/showitem.asp?interpret=Pete+Philly+%26+Perquisite&titel=Mystery+Repeats&cat=a 2. Also, their first album, 'Mindstate' was in the charts for 29 weeks, holding the 52'nd position > http://dutchcharts.nl/showitem.asp?interpret=Pete+Philly+%26+Perquisite&titel=Mindstate&cat=a 3. 'Lovestruck Puzzles' with Kris Berry was also in the charts, for 4 weeks at the 32nd position. > http://dutchcharts.nl/showitem.asp?interpret=Kris+Berry+%26+Perquisite&titel=Lovestruck+Puzzles&cat=a Is this of any use? I will embed this information in the article via referencing. Thanks for your help in advance,

Best, Mink

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The Acting Witan of Mercia Resubmission
Thanks for your comments on this. I've now divided the article into subsections as requested.Snoobysoo (talk) 17:53, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for creating the article. Which aspects of copy editing do you think it needs to be improved?Snoobysoo (talk) 18:15, 6 May 2015 (UTC)
 * A few pointers: The intro could use a reference; The Levellers needs more references; there's a bit of citation overkill happening sometimes; I don't know about the tone in general, perhaps we could ask a few more experienced reviewers, but I have a feeling it could also use slight tweaking. Thanks, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 18:35, 6 May 2015 (UTC)

5nine Software article draft
Hi FoCuSandLeArN, I wanted to thank you for your review and feedback regarding the 5nine Software article. I updated the draft with a few credible sources (TechTarget's SearchWindowsServer and SearchServerVirtualization, and InfoWorld). Thanks again! Amelet (talk) 10:22, 7 May 2015 (UTC)

USPD
I think you missed that Draft:Division of Program Coordination, Planning, and Strategic Initiatives was copied from a work of the US Government, and therefore in the public domain. It does have to be stated explicitly of course. It also has to be rewritten from its present form of a press release. I'll advise the author.  DGG ( talk ) 05:03, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
 * You're right! How silly of me! Thanks for noticing. Cheers, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 13:05, 7 May 2015 (UTC)

AFC: InfoBeans
Thank you for your comment, however I could not understand what do you mean by "Could scrape general notability...". Do you mean I do Web Scraping to get more data/content for this article? or Do you mean I remove some content/data from the article. I also read the general notability guideline on Wikipedia here - https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wikipedia:Notability#General_notability_guideline; but could not understand what to do next. I believe it adheres to general notability guideline.

Please elaborate so I can implement suggestions made by you. Thanks, Avinash VirtualAvi (talk) 06:59, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
 * What I meant by stating that guideline was that it might barely pass notability, but there is no overwhelming coverage, so to speak. Nonetheless, the article needs extensive trimming, due to its neutrality problems (see language, for instance), excessive subsections, puffery and irrelevant information. After that, we can get a second opinion. Thanks! FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 14:41, 7 May 2015 (UTC)

Pinus Rubinstein
Hi Pinus Rubinstein's books "Judische Vatikan in Sadagora" appear in worldcat, (http://www.worldcat.org/search?q=ti%3Ajudische+vatikan+sadagora&qt=results_page), held by many major libraries worldwide. In these books he gives unique historical information about Jewish Sadagora and Czernowitz, and about life in WWII under Russian and Nazi rule. These books were also translated to English and is available online on the most important Jewish Genealogy website Jewishgen, becuase of its importance. I think that sheding light on the writer of these books and his life is of general interest to many readers and scholars of Judaica, Holocaust and WWII, and this is why I wrote about him. All the best Eran — Preceding unsigned comment added by Eranreiss (talk • contribs) 08:52, 6 May 2015 (UTC)
 * It is certainly important! I'm just trying to make sure he passes notability guidelines. I'll contact a few experienced editors in the topic and see what they can do. Thank you for your patience, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 14:59, 6 May 2015 (UTC)
 * I looked at your article. I think you will have a hard time proving Rubinstein's notability - I couldn't find a single reference to him online. But, more important, because of your article I read his books and found them delightful! My father-in-law told us how, as a child, his mother took him to the Sadagora Reb for blessing. Rubinstein's book made all that come alive. So, whatever happens to the article, thanks for pointing me there. --Ravpapa (talk) 07:01, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Thank you for sharing that! It would certainly be a shame to miss such an article on technical notability grounds...Do you know of anyone who could help? FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 13:07, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Notability is not a technical issue. If we were to write about everyone who wrote a book like this, there would be no end to it. I'm afraid that Rubinstein is not going to make it.
 * But I have a different suggestion. Why don't you add a paragraph to the article on Sadhora, mentioning that Rubinstein wrote a book of memoirs, and that there is an organization of Israelis from Sadhora that published it? The truth is, a lot more people will see the reference there than will see the article on Rubinstein in Wikipedia. --Ravpapa (talk) 15:57, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
 * I'll try to communicate that to the submitter, and I'll probably end up being bold and doing it myself. PS: I quite enjoyed your Tilt essay! Best, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 16:07, 7 May 2015 (UTC)

Soraya Syed page
Hi, yes please, I desperately need help with the Soraya Syed page! Please let me know when is good for you. Thank you! Remona — Preceding unsigned comment added by Remonaaly (talk • contribs) 16:07, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
 * I passed on the submission to other reviewers for a second opinion. Let's wait a few days and see what happens. In the meantime, try cleaning the article up a bit, such as with the removal of external in-line links and with the removal of unreferenced information. Happy editing! FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 16:34, 7 May 2015 (UTC)

Somen
Thank you for advice. I cleaned the itinerary section on Somen Debnath's page, leaving only the regions (continents). — Preceding unsigned comment added by AngeliMarines (talk • contribs) 19:12, 7 May 2015 (UTC)

What you did is an improvement, but it still needs more cleanup. I think a lot of the problems would be solved by entirely removing the "Media about Somen Debnath" section. It is redundant to "Itinerary" section, is poorly formatted, and all the youtube references make it look spammy. I hope that helps. 78.26  (spin me / revolutions) 19:18, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Dear reviewer, thank you for advice. I deleted all Media About Somen Debnath. I know you are very busy, but could you kindly please check if this works now or tell me what else to do? With kindest regards, Angelica — Preceding unsigned comment added by AngeliMarines (talk • contribs) 19:38, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for that. It looks better. It still needs a better selection of references (for example here) from independent and reliable sources. When that's done, I'll perform a quick cleanup and accept it if everything looks good. Best, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 20:18, 7 May 2015 (UTC)

Response to your comment on Draft:Aina More.
Thank you for your comment.

In response to your comment: Does she have any singles in charts? FoCuSandLeArN on Draft: Aina More

No, Aina More does not currently have any Singles in the Charts.

Kind Regards,

Roxanne — Preceding unsigned comment added by RoxanneUshedo (talk • contribs) 21:22, 7 May 2015 (UTC)

International Human Rights Law Course
Thanks for taking an interest in my human rights course. The "add yourself as reviewer" option was originally intended for students to add themselves and review each other's pages. My class was however larger than expected this year, and so we have ended up not using this feature. From an assessment point of view, the students have now submitted their assignments, and I am about to mark them. So, I am happy for you to use the "add yourself as a reviewer" feature, or alternatively just comment/edit some of the articles. You will have already seen that the student contributions are quite a mixed bunch, with some excellent contributions and others less so. Some gentle suggestions for improvement would be welcome. Thanks. Humanrights4nz (talk) 21:47, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Thanks for such a prompt response! I'll be more than glad to give them some feedback and review some articles. I'll do so first thing tomorrow. Thanks again, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 21:50, 7 May 2015 (UTC)

Comment on Angel Broking
Hi,

Thanks for your comment. I have added few reference links for the products. Kindly take a look again and let me know if they are fine. Also, I have added references for awards and milestones which I felt are notable. Kindly provide your guidance on the changes to be done to improve the article.

Regards,

--Muab2 (talk) 11:12, 7 May 2015 (UTC)
 * I'd advise you to write the renamed "History" section as prose, and avoid non-neutral language. I've also restructured the products section according to Wikipedia standards. Let's see if we can turn this into a decent article. Thanks, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 14:47, 7 May 2015 (UTC)

Hi,

Thanks for your feedback and help with the article. I have made the necessary changes. Do take a look and let me know how I can improvise the article further.

Regards, --Muab2 (talk) 09:44, 8 May 2015 (UTC)

Unreasonable Search and Seizure in New Zealand
Hi,

Thanks for your feedback on my article. It was made for a university assignment and was my first attempt at a wikipedia article so it was really useful to get some positive feedback and see where I can improve. I'll make those suggested edits as soon as possible.

Regards, Tjm93 (talk) 21:22, 8 May 2015 (UTC)Tjm93
 * That's often how it starts! I've been editing for years after that. Good luck and don't be a stranger. FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 21:24, 8 May 2015 (UTC)

Notability
Dear FoCuSandLeArN,

Thank you for your review of the page I created. Unfortunately it was rejected because of not enough Notability. And you are right, but I saw a lot of pages edited and less notable than this page, do you know why they are accepted ? For example that link : https://fr.wikipedia.org/wiki/Chris_Sattinger and I know this person. Sometimes, you cannot be a little bit more cool for the new users who try hard ? Could you advise me, you, that you have a lot of experience and knowledge.

Thanks Bichonneau — Preceding unsigned comment added by Bichonneau (talk • contribs) 21:35, 8 May 2015 (UTC)
 * I'm sorry, but the subject of the article is simply non-notable for Wikipedia. It won't be accepted no matter what is done to the draft, given it doesn't pass our guidelines. As for the article you mentioned, I can't comment because it's in the French Wikipedia, an entirely different Wiki. Thank you, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 21:47, 8 May 2015 (UTC)

Your comments on Draft:protohistoric Aquitania
Hello, FoCuSandLeArN

I try to respond to your comments (from May, 8) on the distinction I support, between the pages protohistoric Aquitania and Gallia Aquitania. In fact I have added a paragraph to the Draft page, since your questions may be shared by others. In summary, . the two entities have different reference periods : protohistoric Aquitania before the Roman Empire and Gallia Aquitania after the Roman Empire]]. . the geographical limits are different on the north (Garonne or Loire. Moreover, the langages are different, before the roman conquest, on the northern side and on the southern side of the Garonne.

Here is a copy of the new paragraph on Draft page:

Protohistoric Aquitania vs Gallia Aquitania - comparisons Space and time are different:

Schematically, having in common the Atlantic Ocean as a western limit,
 * Gallia Aquitania extends from Pyrenees to Loire as was decided by Augustus.
 * Protohistoric Aquitania extends from Pyrenees to Garonne. These geographical limits of Aquitania, previous to the roman conquest, are described by both Caesar and Strabo.

Chronological dates are distinct :
 * Gallia Aquitania is part of the Roman Empire, after the victory of Julius Caesar at the Battle of Alesia (52 BCE). Its successor Augustus created in fact the province Gallia Aquitania in 27 BCE.
 * Protohistoric Aquitania refers to the periods before the Roman Empire, mainly during the Chalcolithic, Bronze Age and Iron Age Europe, in this area.

Moreover, from a linguistic point of view and before roman conquest, Statements from Julius Caesar and Strabon are quite clear on this point, confirmed by epigraphy. In other words, at its starting point, Gallia Aquitania was an oxymoron.
 * people between Loire and Garonne were Celts tribes
 * people between Garonne and Pyrenees were Aquitani tribes, distinct from Celts ones and speaking a different langage.

Additional comments and references You could still stick for a single page. On the other hand, your question suggest me possibility to ask the same question for Gallia Aquitania and Novempopulania for example : here again, you have part of the territory in common, but differences and distinctions in space covered, time and dates, and people or ethnic groups living in the area. And so on : why not a single huge France page ? The point is of course, how to conclude whether the identity of the different pages are sufficiently distinct.

I have a book (in french) speaking about protohistory and about Aquitaine : Jean Gasco, L'Âge du Bronze dans la moitié sud de la France. Editeur : la maison des roches. "Jean Gasco est actuellement (2000) chargé de recherche au Centre d'Anthropologie de Toulous, UMR 8555 du CNRS" Another (in french) speaking also about protohistory and about the Pyrénées : Christian Rico, Pyrénées romaines : essai sur un pays de frontière. Editeur : bibliothèque de la Casa de Velazquez.

Je vois que vous parlez français, qui est ma langue maternelle. But here we are on english Wikipedia, and so I try to use english. I am more used to write on french Wikipedia. And I also have more french references, especially for a geograhical area such as aquitania/aquitanie/aquitaine. What is the Wikipedia policy, concerning foreign langage in references ? I have put as an "external link" the french Wikipedia page on 'Aquitaine prehistorique', this is not really external, but I don't know any other way.

Sernalhe (talk) 07:56, 9 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Hello again! Thank you for your clarification. I've contacted a few people to see what they have to say, given I'm certainly not knowledgeable about this particular topic. As for your reference question, feel free to provide as many references as you can, regardless of language or medium. À la prochaine, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 14:43, 9 May 2015 (UTC)

Pinus Rubinstein
I realize he's not very well known and there's hardly any info on him online. That's exactly what my contribution attempted to correct. I think he's importane enough and there's the info in his son's book and the info inside his own books.

If this is not enough, and he does not apply to Wikipedia rules - then I give up... Thanks

--Eranreiss (talk) 08:33, 10 May 2015 (UTC)ERan Reiss
 * I know Wikipedia's notability guidelines can be different to what real life considers notable, but that's how it works. Would you be willing to edit the main article to include this information? We could even redirect Pinus Rubinstein towards that section, so that a google search would direct the person there, which is what you intended. Regards, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 20:51, 10 May 2015 (UTC)

Your comments on Draft:Climate Hawks Vote
I welcome an NPOV check. There certainly is potential for controversy on this subject, but there seems to be none so far. As I stated in my disclaimer on the article's talk page, I did a thorough search of sources and found nothing negative. RichardMathews (talk) 05:06, 11 May 2015 (UTC)

Nomination of Dean Santangelo for deletion
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Your comments on Draft:Patrick_Bebelaar
Hi FoCuSandLeArN, thx for your comment. I tried to put as many notable English sources as possible. But given the artist's German origin, many sources are German... I had the article checked by the main auditor from the artist's German page (Wikipedia name: Engelbaet ), which gave pretty positive feedback. Sorry for my naive questions (as I am new at Wikipedia). Shall I do anything now? Or could you even invite Engelbaet ? I appreciate your input (if you want you can put it in the talk on the page Draft:Patrick_Bebelaar ). Your feedback is even more appreciated as I am currently working on some more Jazz Musicians and Celebrities of German and Afghan origin who are internationally active. --ScienceGuard (talk) 15:37, 11 May 2015 (UTC)
 * Source in German are just fine. I just need a German-speaking reviewer to corroborate the facts. I'll talk to Engelbaet and hopefully get some feedback! That sounds great! Regards, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 19:46, 11 May 2015 (UTC)

Meharry-Vanderbilt Alliance
Thanks for the comment and info. Can you specify how much more coverage is needed for the Meharry-Vanderbilt Alliance to merit inclusion?

As it stands I've included a dozen references citing news coverage of the Alliance's efforts and happenings -- 1 about its creation, 2 about its grant funding efforts, 4 about its director, and 2 case study/profiles. If you can let me know what more is needed, I'll specifically search for those items. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mattschorr (talk • contribs) 19:39, 11 May 2015 (UTC)
 * See WP:GNG and WP:CORP for a quick run-down. Thanks, FoCuSandLeArN (talk) 19:49, 11 May 2015 (UTC)

Thanks. Do our references not fulfill these criteria? If I may argue our case ... we have articles from The Tennesseean, The Nashville Business Journal and The Nashville Post, as well as university publications and a case study in Academic Medicine and a profile in TICUA. A couple of those references go to the Alliance's own site, but only when referencing the MVA's mission statement and vision, as I felt it would be best to reference where those statements came from. (But if those need to be removed, I can certainly do so.) I would argue this merits a small article like the one in place. But if we need more than we have, just let me know and I'll start pooling our office for additional references. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mattschorr (talk • contribs) 20:18, 11 May 2015 (UTC)

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