User talk:Football1502/Sandbox

Feedback on your term project
Hi Alison,

I am impressed with your work on wireless broadband so far. I have a few general suggestions and will make selected edits to your page to improve its flow somewhat as well as its accuracy. The general suggestions are:

(1) to shorten the introductory part to just 5-8 lines; you can move the other text to below the table of contents box.

(2) to be somewhat sensitive to the time line of the discussions. For example, Michael Powell is a past Chairman of the FCC but the article suggests that he made this statement recently. Maybe you could add a hint to the date (e.g., by stating: "Former FCC Chairman, in a comment made in [date, which you get from the press release that you cite] said ...").

(3) I would leave out the section on "Presidential statements", kind of a detour, :-)!--JMBauer (talk) 02:33, 25 April 2011 (UTC)

P.S. I like that you address network neutrality; to bring this section up-to-date I suggest that you briefly review the FCC's December 2010 Order on network neutrality. Wireless network neutrality was a very contested issue but in the end the Commission did promulgate less stringent network neutrality rules for wireless than for wireline, in part because wireless capacity is more scarce and may therefore need more careful management. See our class slides for a succinct summary of the policies. --JMBauer (talk) 03:01, 25 April 2011 (UTC)