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Your submission at Articles for creation: African Foodways (December 6)
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WikiDan61 ChatMe!ReadMe!! 17:07, 6 December 2017 (UTC)

Hi Wiki Dan,

The essays on African foodways created by students in my course on African history and foodways. I am an expert who publishes in the field and I am supervising the essay. In terms of scholarship and citations it's a solid piece. However I'm fine with and we already have created and edited title which shows an emphasis on West and Central Africa.

Thanks,

Fopie Fopie (talk) 19:25, 6 December 2017 (UTC)
 * I recognize that your subject area expertise in this topic is to be respected, and I appreciate that you are shepherding your class through this online writing process. However, as a reader and editor, I don't feel this article is ready for publication yet. I'm guessing that each of your students was assigned a different subtopic of "African foodways", and each of them wrote their own part. The problem is that the article lacks coherence and meaningful organization. It appears to be a collection of somewhat unrelated ideas all thrown together on a page. The article needs to be further edited to give it cohesion. WikiDan61 ChatMe!ReadMe!! 13:02, 7 December 2017 (UTC)