User talk:Forrestbevington/sandbox/DublinTourism

=Evaluations=

Spelling/Grammar: Meets Standards

 * Mostly golden overall, couple of capitalization problems like Zoos in the zoo paragraph and Nightly in the first airport paragraph.

Language: Meets Standards

 * Language seems professional and expository, only potential change in second guiness paragraph. Might want to make that a little more professional/detached from the material.

Organization: Exceeds Standards

 * Don't see any problems with your organization

Coding: Meets Standards

 * Everything seems in order

Validity: Exceeds Standards

 * Everything fits together and makes sense.

Completion: Meets Standards

 * Other than the mantra that you can always improve, not sure what more would be needed.

Relevance: Meets Standards

 * I suppose one could quibble about the necessity/relevance of the second guiness paragraph, but honestly, everything seems quite relevant.

Sources: Nearly Meets Standards

 * Looks like you doubled up citing the book of kells citation, so you might need one more. Otherwise your sources seem pretty good.

Citations: Nearly Meets Standards

 * There is something you note as needing citation in the first paragraph.

References: Meets Standards

 * The 17th reference seems to have a slightly different format (link is after title) but everything seems in order

10/19/2018 Evaluation by NBasham1

 * Points: 37.5
 * Grade: 93%

Spelling/Grammar
Meets Standard Second sentence feels a little clunky, might be better as two.

Language
Meets Standard Couple places where language is a little non-neutral, particularly use of word "ironic"

Organization
Exceeds Standard Seems to do the job well, serves as a nice intro.

Coding
Nearly Meets Standard Not sure, but seems like you may have been meaning to link to the wikipedia articles instead of citing them.

Validity
Meets Standard Mostly seems like solid info. Might want one or two more sourced facts to bump it up.

Completion
Meets Standard Again, just a couple more pieces of introductory info/facts could help.

Relevance
Meets Standard The reference to beer may be irrelevant, or could be tied in with a source.

11/6/2018 Evaluation by KoopNasty

 * Points: 37.5
 * Grade: 93.75%

Spelling/Grammar
Nearly Meets Standard On the seventh line, correct "an" to "and". Beginning of the third paragraph the end of the sentence doesn't make sense. First sentence in fourth paragraph doesn't need the first comma you gave.

Language
Meets Standard second to last line should say "awarded" vs. "rewarded". try to eliminate some of the wordiness for a more "boring" dictionary tone.

Organization
Exceeds Standard fits perfectly, looks clean.

Coding
Meets Standard article looks great. just change your link because I couldn't edit the other format. try https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Forrestbevington/sandbox

Validity
Meets Standard Cuisine can be tricky because of the cultural background but seems solid, maybe add like a year of invention to seem more solid.

Completion
Meets Standard Aside from recipe variations the two festival food items you chose seem to cover the background and customs.

Relevance
Meets Standard While the cultural stories about the food seemed to me to fit, the restaurant info may be irrelevant to the rest of the passage. To change this you could add some more detail on german dining, or delete it to avoid the pitfall.

Evaluations
12/5/2018 Evaluation by Koopnasty Koopnasty (talk) 15:30, 5 December 2018 (UTC)

Points: 36.5 Grade: 91.2

Spelling/Grammar Meets Standard The first sentence seemed to be a run on. the last sentence in the first paragraph should ready "spending by visitors in Ireland" instead of "visitors to Ireland". Your photo of the lion reads "Slats the tiger".

Language Nearly meets Standard In your first bulleted list, clarify what the million units are (most likely monetary but just to be safe). Good job describing the locations just in a sense of tourism aspects. I was kind of confused on the last portion about restrictions. It seems like they want to expand the airport but the city wants to restrict use of the expansion? that seems counter intuitive if it is true. Try making the last portion a little less wordy, I had to read it a couple of times to understand. Unless that just the city being dumb.

Organization Nearly meets standard Because of the variety of information you had a lot of headers. They make sense but to clean it up I would combine Tourism Numbers header with the how much they spend in bold header. Maybe have one header for that section that just says Tourist Demographics. You could also throw "Top three visitor groups" under the suggested tourist demographics section.

Coding Meets Standard In this format I can't see the actual code but I don't see anything wrong with it.

Validity Exceeds Standard Impressive

Completion Meets Standard You provided enough information I think. If you really wanted to add you could throw more sites and top attractions on top of the three. Or favorite general tourist activities. Overall, I think you actually have what you need for a good grade.

Relevance Meets Standard You have a good match of amount of content and content that fits. Trying to go hard on your assignment but it is pretty solid I think.

Sources Meets Standard I only saw a few peer reviewed journals but for tourism statistics you went where you had to. A lot of government sites and .com tourist sites as well.

Citations Nearly Meets Standard You left one out in the second sentence.

References Nearly Meets Standard Reformat where it says "check access date" for the last three references by deleting that or adding the reference dates.

Koopnasty (talk) 23:16, 5 December 2018 (UTC)