User talk:Forsterucsd

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Hello, Forsterucsd, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Shalor and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Hi! Here are my notes:


 * I would try to find the start date for the projects, if possible. I've done some examples of this in the first section.


 * This feels kind of choppy, which makes it a little harder to really absorb the gist of everything. I would recommend tweaking and re-styling or re-writing this to be a bit more clear. Keep in mind that this only has to have a general overview, rather than a huge amount of content about various aspects of the project. I've done a sample re-write on this end for the first section. You can definitely use this if you like - it's pretty much just your own work, only re-tooled.


 * This needs some non-primary sources to help back up claims and establish notability, to justify going into the project in this much depth.

I hope this helps! Shalor (Wiki Ed) (talk) 20:48, 2 December 2019 (UTC)