User talk:Fparra247/sandbox

War profiteering

There needs to be an expansion on the definition of war profiteering. There also needs to be better examples and history of the types of war profiteering. The way we have divided the project into doing different sections will allow us to focus on the types and add sources to the information. We can provide examples of each type of war profiteering and give a brief history of each.

Your contribution seems very well written to me. I think it would be interesting for you to link a could of the topics you mentioned with other Wikipedia articles that are already in existence. In regards to structure, I would just suggest a small edit to your first paragraph. In the sentence where you are discussing Walter Beedle Smith, I think you're either missing a parenthesis or you accidentally placed one, depending on your intent. Changing "formerly" to "former" would also help with sentence flow. Other than that, well done. Kmbatt (talk) 20:04, 25 February 2017 (UTC)