User talk:Francois1190/sandbox

some draft notes
Hi,. I'm Adam and I'm providing support for your class. I had some comments on your draft changes to East Boston. Thanks for your work so far. Please let me know if you need a hand or have any questions. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:35, 7 April 2015 (UTC)
 * The changes you have for the introduction should seek to summarize the article. Take a look at the current one. It does an OK job, but it leaves out a bit on history, transportation (look at the section vs. the quick mention of the blue line) and demographics. You've got some added on demographics but I would challenge you to take the intro section as it is now, and split it into three paragraphs. Use the first paragraph for the quick summary of the topic, starting with the same few sentences. But then have a short paragraph summarizing the history and demographics, and a short paragraph summarizing the transportation and locations. Or mix them up however you like. An article like this could have an intro of around 2-4 paragraphs, provided that it's still a good summary.
 * Oh, and in most cases you won't need to put citations in the introduction, as it is summarizing what should already be in the body.
 * You don't have to do the above, but I think it would work better than adding on 2 new paragraphs for 2 new sections.
 * Community resources sections are always tough. Most of these programs are not well covered in the sourcing, which means we end up using their own materials as sources or sourcing a directory of organizations. We're doing the latter here but all we can say is that they exist. Are there some reliable sources that talk about the organizations? Magazine profiles? Newspaper? If not, I'm worried that this section may be tough to integrate.

I'm also not sure there's much to the urban polices section. The BRA hosts comment on new projects, but pretty much every city does that. Adam (Wiki Ed) (talk) 17:37, 7 April 2015 (UTC)