User talk:Frankiecc/sandbox

Feedback on possible topics
This list looks great - all these topics look feasible to research. The articles on books may be easiest to improve since they are less developed already.

Really Thorough draft
I appreciate all the work you put into drawing all of this information from your sources and summarizing it. That said, I wonder if it's too much! You might consider cutting somewhat before you move your draft to the mainspace, just really paring it down to what you think is essential information about Konoe. 136.36.115.12 (talk) 13:21, 4 November 2019 (UTC)

Peer review 2
You've put a lot of solid work into this draft. You may consider further summarizing the most important information and then redirecting readers to additional readings on the subject. If you do choose to keep the long format write-up, you may require additional sources as you only have 3 for a few thousand words.

Additionally, consider revising sentences that read like this: "By way of the New Order Movement, Konoe ended the Japanese political parties in 1940, thereby aiding the pro war factions in the military, he deemed the parties as too liberal, and divisive." to more direct language. It's not that this is a bad sentence, rather it may be possible to revise it to a format which is easier to immediately understand. (direct language)

I hope this input is helpful in some way.

Kronolyx (talk) 17:27, 9 November 2019 (UTC)