User talk:Friscoforrest/sandbox

'''Peer Review of Work Section '''

Hi Forrest,

I made some minor edits but had some questions concerning clarity and references:


 * what do you mean by language growth in paragraph 1? something you can link to another page?
 * can the last item in paragraph 1 be pared down? something like “mutual influences of American literature, folkore, culture, and language”…? just feels a little wordy as is
 * are the references in paragraph 2 correct for the latin term statements and word coinage? I notice they ref Synder Yost, but I don’t see where that ref contains that info
 * I italicized the English variations of latin terms, but saw "darn" later in quotation marks; do you think these should all be in quotes or italicized? not sure what wiki's formatting is for this
 * in the last paragraph, description of work with ballads could use less jargon, but I haven't read the work, so I'm not sure how to simplify

Thanks John! I believe that I fixed your comments.

Hey Sugene,

Here are couple of small things--
 * In line 3 you have '1990' as her playing a tennis match. If she did do this in 1990 then she was likely 150 years old and that is awesome!


 * This isn't clear to me: "playing a tie-break match against the Olympic men’s singles titleholder." Did she win the match or just play? Also, who was the singles title holder?


 * "alongside working on her doctorate at Heidelberg University" The word 'alongside' might need to be switched-- maybe a comma and ,the entire time working on her doctorate- I'm not sure exactly what to replace it with at this moment.


 * "showing interest in figure skating, earned a 100 mile cycling medal in 1906, introduced skiing to Lincoln as well as being captain of her school’s basketball team." All of the 'action' words in this sentence should be parallel--- showing, introducing, AND being.


 * Find a different word than 'pursued'....continued to be involved?


 * the last sentence, change 'bring'

Friscoforrest (talk) 20:49, 30 November 2017 (UTC)Forrest