User talk:Frod6580/sandbox

Can you think of specific changes that you might make to improve either article? Jmmcabee (talk) 17:36, 18 April 2017 (UTC)jmmcabee

Comments on Ideas Draft
Are you leaning toward any of these? Can't believe a plant-plant signaling article doesn't exist! Can you find other articles that cover this topic? What does Wikipedia suggest when you search under that topic? Your second sample sentence looks like it could use some proofreading. Jmmcabee (talk) 18:01, 26 April 2017 (UTC)jmmcabee

Comments on Article Revision
Your lead paragraph looks good. Hopefully, other people will be able to find the article and contribute to it because there's a lot that could be included! If you thought you might be interested in working on it ongoing that might be another way to get the article much further beyond the lead paragraph. Jmmcabee (talk) 19:43, 10 May 2017 (UTC)jmmcabee

Comments on second draft
I like the part you added about the function of terpenoids. Can you label your section as 2nd draft, so your peer reviewer can find it easily?

Jmmcabee (talk) 17:41, 15 May 2017 (UTC)jmmcabee

I feel as though there are a little too many citations in the first sentence. I would recommend using 1 or 2 per sentence, only because it is distracting to the reading itself. Overall the tone is neutral and clear. Good job on the terpeniods, I really like the addition of that section and read was fun! Daniel Seo94 — Preceding unsigned comment added by Daniel Seo94 (talk • contribs) 20:28, 18 May 2017 (UTC)

Peer Review
I think that the first section is awesome but caution you on your citing, it was distracting at times! Secondly, the Terpenoids is jam packed with information and at first I had no idea what it all meant. I think switching the order of your first and second paragraphs will help the reader better understand the point of your topic and will make the section more clear. It also allows your reader to read the biochem stuff only if they have to, as opposed to muddling through it before finding an answer.Ltmansfield (talk) 23:59, 21 May 2017 (UTC)