User talk:Furlong.e/sandbox

23:27, 29 October 2018 (UTC)Renakat123 (talk)What does the article (or section) do well? Your article is very informative, nicely organized, and appropriately written and I can tell you spent a lot of time working on it!

What changes would you suggest overall? Overall the article looks really good! I only noticed two minor things that I would change:
 * "Part of any type of nursing includes meeting the patient where they are at." This sentence is confusing and has an informal tone in comparison to the rest of the article.
 * "There are two levels of certification: one for nurse's holding a bachelor's degree and one for nurse's holding a master's degree." Nurses should be pluralized without an apostrophe.

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve her contribution? Under the Certification section, you could put a sub-heading for the United States for clarity, because you mention other countries in the article.

Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let her know! I like how you quoted the mission statements from the organizations, and will consider doing that in my article as well.

Quincyaray (talk) 23:54, 28 October 2018 (UTC)

What does the article (or section) do well? The article is well written and informative. It is also organized really well. I like that you included examples of global initiatives to fix the previous issue of the original article being very focused on the US.

What changes would you suggest overall? Just one thing, the sentence “Part of any type of nursing includes meeting the patient where they are at,” is worded a little confusingly. Same thing for this sentence; Holistic nurses use deep listening and a unconditional positive regard to communication with patients Something about the sentence was a little bit awkward to read, but the article looks fine!

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? There are just some sentences that could use restructuring for clarity, otherwise well written! Renakat123 (talk) 23:27, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

Thank you for the feedback. I appreciate your comments and have made all of the suggested changes to my Wikipedia page. Furlong.e (talk) 15:07, 31 October 2018 (UTC)Furlong.e