User talk:G Kielkucki/Hypodermic Needle Model/Ewesolick Peer Review

Grammatical changes are Italicized. All of your articles will be in quotations, my additions will not be.

"An example of this is extremist messages on social media linked to terrorist groups. Since the attacks on 9/11, social media and technology have made it easier for attackers to spread their ideologies and recruit new members across the globe. Terrorists will utilize these platforms to spread a particular narrative that attempts to persuade viewers to agree with their particular side, proving that there is a strong link between communication and terrorism. In response to these messages, the current government strategy is to simply remove the extremist messages from social media, assuming that by taking away the “bad” will result in the “good.” But, does it truly stop these attackers from spreading their messages or does it fuel their anger and will to keep going? The argument against the theory goes on to say that by taking their posts down, it only perpetuates the issue. With this argument, another question arises: if the Hypodermic Needle Theory does not hold relevance here, what theory would apply to the extremists' tactics?"

This reads more like an argumentative essay you would present for a class instead of a wiki article. Try cutting out the leading questions and putting in your references so the article does not seem baseless. You are making an argument that an organization does something, you need to have evidence within it for it not to be considered opinion-based or biased.

References should just be the proper citation, it should not include any annotations.