User talk:Gabegrossman/sandbox

Feedback from Clara-a97

Hi Gabegrossman, I find the topic of the article very interesting and I liked your detailed contribution to it. The second part is particularly relevant and it made me wonder how the Gansu Wind Farm could play out in light of willingness of China to reach more energy security and sustainability and to become a leader in the sector (check out this article by the NYT if you are interested: https://www.nytimes.com/2017/01/05/world/asia/china-renewable-energy-investment.html). I made some grammatical edits. If I may, I would also suggest that you change the title of your first subpart (“Why Gansu is underutilized”) to something more simple and that does not imply a question structure (for example “Reasons for Underutilization” or simply “Underutilization”), it seems more common to find such structures in Wikipedia. I would also rephrase this sentence: “ The isolated location and lack of infrastructure has made the Gansu wind farm pretty useless”, in particular the end since it gives it a familiar register. You should also add your sources through footnotes and reference links (that would be put in a reference list at the end of the article by the system) in order for readers to possibly check them out or to look at the relevance and truthfulness of your contributions.

Clara-a97 (talk) 01:23, 23 November 2017 (UTC)

https://www.nytimes.com/2017/01/05/world/asia/china-renewable-energy-investment.html)