User talk:Gabewallace/sandbox

1) What have you done to revise/add on to your Wikipedia article? If there's anything you still have left to do, what is it?

I've done research on the progress and critical response of the revival. I don't know if there is anything left!

2) What's going well? What are you most proud of so far?

I was able to find a plethora of information! I'm really glad that I was able to write about diversity and inclusion pertaining to W&G.

3) What specific places in the article do you want feedback on from your peers?

Just if there is anything to add/sort out for clarity's sake. I want it to flow easily and be easy to read.

McKenzie's Peer Review
Hey Gabe, You write very well and I was intrigued the whole entire read. Your word choice in some places, however, could cause a little discomfort for others. Some descriptor words can be interpreted into bias, so be careful with some of those. As well as words like "clearly" or "undoubtedly". It just comes off as personal, rather than just plain citing or aiding information. Your information was all very relevant and went well with the article itself. However, you may want to section those paragraphs off, so you don't combine too many alternating topics in one big area. It would also help you organize your information. My question is: Are you adding this information in the sections already made? Or are you going to split them into their own? Other than that, all good. And accurate use of sources! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mckvnz (talk • contribs) 18:03, 18 April 2018 (UTC)