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This article seems like it will be very interesting. The abstract is interesting but I have a few questions about it. I think you need to explain why the study, numbered 1, is an example of attachment behaviour without domestication since the wolves were raised by humans. Is this because of the difference in the ages or length of time that they raised by humans? You could also talk about the ways in which wolves are attached to each other, since attachment behaviour of wolves is not limited to human/wolf interaction. Maybe you could look up the reasons that wolves travel in packs, how they mate with each other, etc. to see if any of those topics relate to attachment behaviour. I also think that you could add in how this attachment behaviour works and what the biological and evolutional basis is behind it. For example, are these attachments due to pair bonding at a neurological level, or maybe due to something else? You could also talk about the differences between attachment between wolves and humans, and attachment between wolves and other wolves. All of this will depend on references and studies that you can find. My last critic is that you could probably use many more references.Erc045 (talk) 16:22, 21 October 2017 (UTC) I hope this helps.

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Wolf attachment behaviour is a great concept to explore. Your ideas are clear and easy to follow. A few things I would like to mention. This sentence " As the wolf is a non domesticated animal this is an example of attachment behaviour without domestication" implies that there might be more than one kind of attachment behaviour, If that's the case, I think you might want to introduce them first before going to this example.

These two ideas seem to contradict each other

"Wolves that were raised for 3-7 weeks showed attachment behaviour to their human caregivers"

"Another study showed that wolves that were hand-reared for 16 weeks of their lives by human caregivers showed attachment behavior to a stranger rather than their caregiver"

It would be good to build on both of these ideas and clarify why different studies showed different results

Goodluck on the rest of your paper :) Gnels (talk) 21:17, 23 October 2017 (UTC)Gnels

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Thank you for the feedback bu when i refer to domestication I am referring to the genetic difference between domesticated and wild populations. Also there is a difference due to age. Also thanks for pointing out how I can discuss attachment behaviour between wolves and other wolves. Also yes I will try to find more references for this subject though scholarly articles for this subject are a bit scarce.(Gavinmemorial (talk) 21:09, 25 October 2017 (UTC))

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Thank you for the feedback I admit that the contradiction in my abstract sounds slightly odd but it is seen in the studies I referenced that wolves have a bit of a shift in their attachment behaviour as they age. Also the domestication comment about wolves was to bring to attention that the closet relative to wolves that have attachment behaviour are dogs which are domesticated.So its a bit interesting that an animal that is not domesticated actually displays this behaviour to humans. I admit that my language was off and thank you for the feedback I will certainly fix it later.(Gavinmemorial (talk) 21:15, 25 October 2017 (UTC))

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Thank you Gavinmemorial for your feed back. I will certainly go into greater explanation of the attacking behaviour. As for your question. I did not talk about energy expenditure in my article. Erc045 (talk) 17:20, 30 October 2017 (UTC)