User talk:Gcayanan/sandbox

Feedback on 2nd draft
Michelev (talk) 23:33, 15 April 2014 (UTC)
 * Revise all sentences to remove first person ("we").
 * Needs editing for spelling, clarity, and excessive wordiness.
 * Needs grounding in time and space; in other words, where is this technology required and used? When did it start being used?
 * You may be able to find more basic, background information from government or trade group websites. The EPA would be a good place to start.