User talk:General11

Advertising
In this edit (typical of several you have recently made), you write:


 * Visit wallpaper.com to see Martin Parr's recent collaboration with design icon Paul Smith. Hitting the streets of Ilford with nothing but a camera and the Autumn 2007 collection of Paul Smith's men's line, the results are both humorous and poignant in equal measure. To check out the gallery visit [URL]


 * Smith isn't an icon, he's a designer.
 * It's unlikely that Parr "hit the streets of Ilford with nothing but a camera and [some clothes]": he'd have had somebody to hold the clothes, a pile of model releases, organization to let people change into and out of the clothes, etc.
 * I've seen the results (actual photos, on a wall), and they're not humorous at all. Well, to you they are and to me they're not. So it's a matter of opinion. But this is an encyclopedia: my opinion doesn't matter and neither does yours.
 * External links shouldn't be written in the imperative ("Visit...").
 * "To check out the gallery visit..." is wordy. See how it's done elsewhere. (Try these.)

Basically you seem to be writing ad copy for wallpaper.com. But please remember that Wikipedia doesn't advertise.

I look forward to your wallpaper.com-unrelated edits. -- Hoary 16:21, 3 August 2007 (UTC)