User talk:GinnyMae

Welcome!
Hello, GinnyMae, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with the Wiki Education Foundation; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Hey Ginny! just practicing using the talk page for week 1 ! Chloe.93 (talk) 23:51, 13 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Hi Chloe!GinnyMae (talk) 17:41, 17 September 2016 (UTC)

Feedback request
I got your message and took a look at your sandbox. It looks really good, but you should link terms that the average reader wouldn't be familiar with. That way they can click through and learn more about the topic. (When replying to this message, please include  in your response, to ensure that I see your reply.) Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:00, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Thank you for the feedback Ian! I will be sure to incorporate links to other articles as I continue editing! GinnyMae (talk) 18:30, 22 October 2016 (UTC)

Peer Review
Hi Ginny, I looked at your sandbox, it looks really great! I liked how you linked to a lot of different pages in your causes section. I think that you should do that for epidemiology section as well e.g. dyspnea. I think that the information that your provided was really well referenced and thorough! It also reads like one would expect a wikipedia article to read (sounds encyclopedic) so that's good. I would remove the list of references that you have under the title "bibliography" header and just use the reference list generated by wikipedia, it just feels a little redundant to have both. Other than that, I like the way that you've structured your sections and your use of headers. Keep up the good work! Cleo — Preceding unsigned comment added by Cleotheslp (talk • contribs) 03:19, 30 October 2016 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback ! Those are excellent suggestions which I will definitely incorporate as I continue to work on the draft and move it into mainspace! GinnyMae (talk) 03:27, 30 October 2016 (UTC)