User talk:Glaudeman040/sandbox

Marietou's Peer Review
To start off with I found that the edits you made to the wikipedia page were very detailed and were a substantial addition to the Wikipedia page. I like the fact that you utilized the digital platform by including hyperlinks to other Wikipedia pages. Your sentences were not too wordy and that made it easier to follow. However, there are times where you could have used language that was simpler so that it would be easy for all individuals of different age groups to follow. For example, at one point you say "auxiliary teaching outside of the classroom"; instead of using the word auxiliary, you could use another word that may make more sense in the context of the sentence. Another instance of where simpler language could have been used is when you say "the information that was relayed in the videos was..." instead of using the word relayed you could say the information in the videos, just so that it can be understood by readers of all ages and that may have different levels of English proficiency. Overall, my Ain suggestion for you is making sure that the language you use is not as complex so that it can be understood my viewers of all different backgrounds. However, it does seem that you wrote this article in your own words and it seems as if a lot of thought and research with reliable sources was put into it.
 * thank you so much for the suggestions!

Glaudeman040 (talk) 16:37, 20 April 2018 (UTC)