User talk:Glopez03/sandbox

Hey Glen, I think that the wiki article is off to a great start. I am sure that you are aware that more information for each section is required. I will like to know if there is more information on how it develops, or the molecular aspect of it. If you can add more on the reference and recent published articles will help, specially since its required as explained in the rubric. Thank you, I now know more about Apocrine miliaria. (reviewer: Erica Valdez)

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This is Heather Brown reviewing. I think this is a good start. The sections that are here are well written and detailed enough for me to understand the condition. I think, if applicable, a few more sections as outlined in the rubric will be sufficient. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Hbrown09 (talk • contribs) 21:25, 13 November 2017 (UTC)

This is Kyriakos Papalexatos reviewing. Your off to a start, its still a work in progress with additional sections required. Even the section listed still need additional information. Find some current research to help aid with your article. Kyriakos Papalexatos — Preceding unsigned comment added by 2601:243:300:A369:F1E9:813C:F728:6C63 (talk) 18:35, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

Sweiner02 (talk) 21:25, 26 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Bold the first use of the disease name.
 * Check grammar and editing.
 * Missing some information in abstract.
 * There's some nice clear text and information in the original which you are not using. How come? Starting from the original is better! Plus, some of it has more information or is clearer than what you have done. Don't lose anything!! I recommend copying the original, starting from that and only adding in your text when it is new and contains material not found in the original.
 * Missing several key sections.