User talk:GoingGrey

Persecution of Ancient Roman Religion
I applaud your effort in undertaking the arduous task of salvaging one of the most terribly lame articles I have seen so far. I feel like I'm an 10th grade teacher who just received a history report from the kid who sits in the back with the Cradle of Filth t-shirt. Although the article is still pretty weak, your edit was definitely a good start. However, this sentence near the beginning is a little unusual:

At first, Christianity was primarily a response to the then-current practices of Judaism, but quickly began to respond to the existing Egyptian, Greek and Roman religions.

I don't know if that's the right way to word it. Christianity wasn't merely a 'response' to Judaism's current practices. The sentence seems to downplay Christianity's beliefs and might even take a biased stance towards the beliefs of the early church. Rather, the emphasis should deal with the fact that, although Christians in the earliest communities had to deal with the opposition and oppression with the Jewish (and Roman) cultures which were present in Judaea at the time, and it's subsequent difficulties in Roman-Greek territories in the earlier years of oppression. It would also be good to flesh out exactly how and why Christianity evolved from an underground church to that which was the state church of the empire. A good source would be "Orthodox Church" by Kallistos Timothy Ware, of which there are excerpts available online.. Additionally, the sentence seems to be extremely out of place. It's wedged between to unrelated ideas, and doesn't seem to create a bridge between them. Additionally, the first sentence of that section is very essay-esque. As I'm busy with other things, it's hard to contribute as much as I would like - not to mention the fact that it's very frustration to start editing an article with so much information at such a low level of quality. Thanks for any help you can give to the article.--C.Logan 19:01, 22 March 2007 (UTC)