User talk:Goldfinch12/Al-Andalus/Curious Shrimp Peer Review

Your contribution to the Al-Andalus page is very well-written, and I really enjoyed the detailed descriptions of the various scripts. Initially, however, I am curious if the development of these scripts is specific to the region you are writing about or if you are referencing styles that did not originate in Al-Andalus. Although it is interesting to know where the styles come from and how they differ from one another, it is a little confusing if/how they relate to your subject. Additionally, it might be helpful to break up your paragraphs a little more so the content is easier to absorb.

I also found that this piece does a great job of maintaining a neutral tone throughout most of the section, but the beginning presents a couple of points that sound more opinionated than purely factual. Specifically, the sentence "we don't need to emphasize the importance of calligraphy in Islamic art here" makes a really interesting point, but I think it needs more follow-up and explanation to ensure that it comes across as a well-supported idea rather than a personal opinion. It might be helpful to find an additional source that expresses a similar sentiment, although I know it can be really difficult to find information on some of these topics. In terms of the source that is listed, it seems like a very strong reference that accurately supports many of the claims being made.

Finally, as I mentioned previously, there is a lot of detailed information on the formation of scripts, but I would also like to understand other characteristics of these manuscripts. Since the first paragraph discusses the political role of these writings, I want to understand how they do so and if there were any themes or subject matter that may have tied these manuscripts together. Overall, however, this draft is super strong, and I look forward to seeing it develop. Curious Shrimp (talk) 18:55, 9 March 2024 (UTC)