User talk:Gpierce55/Pavilion Lake

Gpierce55 review
1.) The lead is concise and hits the important topics such as general location and that it is freshwater however given that microbialites are mentioned in the lead, I feel like there should be more information on it in the body. Or you could take it out of the lead.

2.) I like how Location and Local Communities are combined because they build off each other. I feel like Microbialites and Scientific Research are not posed to be related so I think it would make more sense to have two different sections here. Unless there was research specific to the microbialites however that is not mentioned here.

3.)The resources give information about the microbialite and exploration in the Lake which is less than half of the current content. Especially since you say that the "most notable" thing about the lake are these organisms, I feel like you could have more content here. However, there is nothing off-topic in the article and it does not seem to be biased towards any viewpoint which is good.

4.) There are no unneutral phrases and is very matter of fact. The information in the article is relatively neutral and there are no bold claims on behalf of any groups or people.

5.) Currently you only have two sources but both are reliable sources. It would not hurt to find more reliable sources to add to your microbialites section and to create references to the information in the original Wikipedia page. The location and local communities section which is from the original article is uncited and should be cited to some source. Lastly, in your references, you have the same resource twice so make sure you fix that.

Overall, really good job with this! The main thing is just to add more to the microbialites section and get more sources to at least provide citations to the original information. Jegg247 (talk) 22:27, 10 November 2021 (UTC)Jegg247