User talk:Gracelorelei/sandbox/dewallen

=Evaluations= ==11/14/2018 Evaluation by -Ballard8 (talk) 02:14, 15 November 2018 (UTC)

Spelling/Grammar
Meets ExpectationsI have added/subtracted comma use and helped clean up the run on sentences. It was faster/easier to copy and paste the bit I made corrections in - rather than writing out a list.

Tourism: (New Section)

Paragraph 1: With over 18 Million visitors coming in and out of Amsterdam every year [1] De Wallen, well known for its sex and drug oriented business’, is a top tourist destination (attracting) people from all over the world. Tourists who travel to this region are able to see live sex shows as well as purchase a wide array of sex services.

Paragraph 2: I would suggest taking out "Additionally" to begin your sentence. You say it a second time below and the paragraph starts out beautifully without it.

Sex Work (addition):

Despite the alluring and unconventional atmosphere of De Wallen, sex trafficking and forced prostitution are serious issues the area faces. To combat this Amsterdam lawmakers have launched Plan 1012 in 2007, referring to the 1012 area code of the Red Light District.[6] The primary goals of the plan include “(a) dismantling criminal infrastructure, (b) reducing concentration of criminogenic and low- quality enterprises, and (c) realising a qualitative and diverse entry area.”[7] Plan 1012 pushes to work towards decreasing criminal activity related to sex and drugs. Originally, Plan 1012 was to close down 40% of brothels in the district; but under a new plan proposed in 2015 only 25% of brothels were forced to close.[8] Plan 1012 pushed to remove visible sex work from De Wallen in hopes of establishing a "re-appreciation" of the historic urban center, and to avoid sex trafficking in the area by enforcing rules and regulations.[9]

History (addition)

During the late 20th century De Wallen was a perilous area inhabited by drug users and dealers creating an uneasy atmosphere. In this time period De Wallen was referred to as the Endstation and the prominent drug scene became widely known by drug users all over Europe.[9]

In 1984 NV Zeedijk, a governmental and local entrepreneurial project ran by the department manager of Project 1012,[10] focused on bettering the quality of life on Zeedijk, (on the) popular street in De Wallen. The Project resulted in the displacement of many drug users and dealers. This was a pivotal primary development of the transformation of the district.[9]

At the same time, Dutch sex workers in the region pushed for governmental awareness and security because of the ambivalent laws that negatively effected their Sex Work. A sex-workers’ advocacy group, De Rode Draad (The Red Thread), pro- tested against the injustices and lack of visibility of sex work they saw in the Dutch system. Dutch sex workers pushed for the acceptance and recognition of their work from the Dutch government.[9]

Language
Meets ExpectationsGreat tone! The writing is very well done.

Organization
Exceeds ExpectationsWell laid out and has effected flow.

Coding
Meets Expectations Need a reference section, but overall looks great.

Validity
Exceeds Expectations Paired with this wiki article the information is fantastic. The "tourism" section would be a great addition to the overall article.

Completion
Exceeds Expectations This feels complete to me.

Relevance
Meets Expectations All the content is relevant.

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds Expectations

Language
Meets Expectations - Formal language and tone.

Organization
Meets Expectations - Well structured, nothing seems out of place.

Coding
Meets Expectations

Validity
Exceeds Expectations - Sources appear to be trustworthy.

Completion
Meets Expectations - Appears ready for the article, minus the "addition to" portions.

Relevance
Exceeds Expectations - All of the information seemed relevant to the topic.

11/8/2018 Evaluation by User:Mariaalto (talk) 1:40, 9 November 2018 (UTC)
Spelling/Grammar: Exceeds Expectations

Language: Meets Expectations

Organization: Nearly Meets Expectations - could use headers

Coding: Exceeds Expectations

Validity: Exceeds Expectations

Completion: Meets Expectations - more formatting is needed

Relevance: Exceeds Expectations

Sources: Exceeds Expectations

Citations: Exceeds Expectations

References: Meets Expectations - needs a header — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mariaalto (talk • contribs) 21:45, 9 November 2018 (UTC)

Spelling/Grammar
Exceeds Expectations Everything looks like it is spelled correctly and grammar is good.

Language
Meets Expectations The language is in keeping with the rest of the article.

Organization
Exceeds Expectations The layout is well organized into specific sections that are clear to the reader.

Coding
Exceeds Expectations There are several good links to relevant topics of interest. Well done.

Validity
Meets Expectations The content you have added is valid and useful for expanding the article.

Completion
Exceeds Expectations You have added more than enough content to satisfy the assignment.

Relevance
Meets Expectations Highly relevant to the specific neighborhood.