User talk:Gracemm0332/sandbox

Tone
Follows expected tone well. Consider what if you need an additional headings when migrating the data to the live page, I don't think I'd add polyphenals under 'Classification of cider apples' or 'Styles' but it seems too specific to be a number 3. It's more of a 3.1. For example pytochemicals are mentioned under the heading: human consumption on the apple page. That's clearly not the right place here, but an example of a larger heading to consider. Bryantlib (talk) 02:04, 1 May 2018 (UTC)

Before making the paragraph 'live'
Remember to work with group members when uploading to the live page to ensure you dont upload the same information. Also consider how you will insert your information into the existing cider page. You may have to break up your sentences or not include everything depending on the information that is already on the page.

PROOFREAD your paragraph before you make your information 'live'.

Before you post make sure one person in your group created a new section on the Cider apple talk page you are uploading to, letting the people watching the page know you are making edits. And also make sure you summarize your final change, when submitting to the live page. If you don't remember how to do these steps, re-watch the tutorial. :)Bryantlib (talk) 15:51, 7 May 2018 (UTC)

Content
Overall nice job.

“…but there are not enough produced in the U.S. to meet the needs of the fast growing cider industry.”

Suggest: “…but there is a limited supply of bittersweet and bittersharp apples in the U.S. to meet the needs of the fast-growing cider industry.”

Remember that Wikipedia is international. Add in a comment about other country’s cider apple supply.

Fruit Quarterly should be “New York Fruit Quarterly” Ciderprof1 (talk) 16:42, 7 May 2018 (UTC)