User talk:Greekazoid

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Hello, Greekazoid, and welcome to Wikipedia! My name is Ian and I work with Wiki Education; I help support students who are editing as part of a class assignment.

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Hey, finished my article review. Hope it is helpful. There is no lead in your contribution. Could you add something that relates to your contribution and how this concept contribution to later philosophers' ideas?

Overall structure looks great and I think that it balances the ideas of each ancient philosophers perspective.

I think that the balance is good, however the part on positive psychology is eudaimonia is a little short and I'm wondering if it should be added into a different section or if there's anything you could add to it? Although the lead could be longer given the overall length of the article.

Neutrality seems overall good, but at points in the part about Nicomachean ethics it could be made more clear that these are Aristotle's philosophical ideas and not facts about life. Could you alter some of these phrasings so that it comes off more neutral.

I think that your addition of sources is great and could help this article immensely, especially given the several flags on it. I like that you added more recent sources. Readers can see how ideas like this are greater built upon in modern academic circles and what these historical ideas mean to modern philosophers. They all seem to be attributed accurately based on what I read as well. — Preceding unsigned comment added by SpaceVarangian (talk • contribs) 01:36, 18 November 2021 (UTC)

ExSilvissima Peer Review
Hello! Here are my thoughts on the edits you made in the Eudaimonia sandbox, let me know if you have questions about anything I said!

I think the changes you made to the section starting with "In his Nicomachean Ethics (1095a15–22) Aristotle says..." make it significantly easier to follow! My one question/concern is about the use of "we" (WP:PRONOUN), maybe it could be rephrased as something like "When someone is said to be a very happy person, that usually means that they seem to be subjectively content with the way..."

Good move adding a citation to the Epicurus section

Might be worth linking the Republic wiki article again when it appears in the Plato section

The Gorgias (dialogue) and Callicles could also definitely be linked (same with a couple other characters/places (Glaucon, Lydia), just to make it easier to get more background info)

Could add some clickable links to the works listed in the Socrates section (Plato Apology 30b, Euthydemus 280d-282d, Meno 87d-89a) (edit: just realized the citations aren't showing up here, but they should show up if you click "ExSilvissima's Peer Review" under your article on the class dashboard!)

Reading thru The Stoics section in the original article, it might be worth breaking the first paragraph up in the middle, making the discussion of the Christian idea of virtue its own paragraph (not a vital change tho)

Overall, I think you did a good job of adding citations where they were missing and making the article more accessible!

"Plato, Apology, section 30b". www.perseus.tufts.edu. Retrieved 2021-11-20.

"Plato, Euthydemus, section 280d". www.perseus.tufts.edu. Retrieved 2021-11-20.

"Plato, Meno, section 87d". www.perseus.tufts.edu. Retrieved 2021-11-20.

ExSilvissima (talk) 03:22, 20 November 2021 (UTC)