User talk:Greenshakshuka/Internet culture/

Week 12 feedback: It's not clear that you've fully developed the additions you planned to add (listed below) or as I mentioned in your feedback last week if you’ve copied over your copy edits from here (or if you plan to): https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Greenshakshuka/new_sandbox. The article also has a lot of problems with a lack of neutral writing that you should consider editing. To satisfy the requirements of the assignment you should either add more research or work on revising the sections of the existing article that are written in non-neutral style or that are not supported by citations. The edits you do have are ready to move over. Adrishaw (talk) 21:29, 18 November 2020 (UTC)

Things to work on for your Week 9 continued edits: Adrishaw (talk) 13:23, 21 October 2020 (UTC)
 * Evaluate an article: Go back to your article evaluation and pull out the list of things you said you could improve on the existing article. Put that list here in the talk page and cross things off as you do them (you can also edit what I have said below and cross things off as you complete them).
 * Copyedits: Move those to this sandbox, and when you do so publish each with explicit notes on what you changed from the original Wikipedia article. That way when you migrate your work to live Wikipedia you will be able to publish and explain each change as you go. Doing so is a required part of the Week 13 Wikipedia assignment. You should also go through and see what other copyedits you can make to the exisitng article as what you did for that exercise (which was enough for exercise) was just a brief section.
 * Bibliography: I didn't notice before, but you put your "Bibliography" on the "talk page" of the Bibliography but didn't publish the sandbox itself (so if you click on "bibliography" in your contribution history you can find it, but it's not on your sandbox list. This is only a big deal if you are having trouble finding it. This is a good start for a bibliography, but you should starting summarizing this work and possibly finding more to build out your contributions to the existing Wikipedia article. There is for instance a section that is flagged for not citing sources, are there some you could add there?
 * Citing sources: One of your citations is not added correctly (it links to a "Shibboleth Authentication Request"). You should delete and fix this. In addition, consider where the content you are adding will appear. You shouldn't write things like "There was a study about a teacher", you should introduce the study's authors and perhaps even the title/year (this is why those are what I ask you to do in the weekly synthesis paragraphs).
 * Adding media/hyperlinks: You did not add the hyperlinks required in Week 8, but you should go through and see if there are things that should be hyperlinks in whatever you add and the existing article. The image you added is fine, but be sure before you add media to the live Wikipedia article that it is actually necessary or contributes to the article (that is, you had to do it for this assignment, but in your final Wikipedia contributions don't add it just to add it).
 * Overall: You seem to be doing things week by week, but now you really need to focus on the bigger picture of what you plan to add/edit here. Is there more in the existing article that needs copyediting? More citations you can use to expand on the sections you said were out of date or needed to be developed more? The more planning you can do now the easier it will be for you to chip away at those edits between now and November 22 when you need to move your final edits to live Wikipedia.

10/25/20 - Planned additions to Wikipedia article: "Internet Culture"
For week 9, I'll continue researching and draft some additions that I plan to put under the Social Impact section of the Wikipedia article "Internet culture".

Here is a copy of some of my edit ideas from the article evaluation: Social Impact Positive Community forming/included Information sharing Negative Mental health Stunted growth/alternative ways of communicating/nontraditional ways of communicating Generational divide Loss of connection with reality i.e. if you can live your full life online, what is “traditional” reality for? Internet addiction disorder Over-reliance Cyberbullying Distorted self perception (i.e. instagram photos/editing/models/unrealistic standards) Post Human/Singularity — Preceding unsigned comment added by Greenshakshuka (talk • contribs) 02:51, 26 October 2020 (UTC)