User talk:Grevs152/sandbox

Grace- So far you are off to a good start. I know these artists are not too well known and there is therefore not too much information on them. Regarding the overall structure of the article- I would add sections such as "Early Life" or "Early Life and Works," then "Maturity" or "Later Works, and lastly "Major Works" which you have already. This creates a sense of flow through the article and also gives the reader a good perspective as to how the Andrea evolved as an artist. If he has a legacy, meaning he influenced other artists or had pupils, I would include a section on that too (mine does not, therefore I didn't include that section).

A few grammatical and stylistic edits I would make:

Include the dates of the artist immidiately after his name, and include where he died in a sentence if you want.

"Andrea di Giusto (c. 1400- September 2, 1450), also known as Andrea Manzini or Andrea di Giusto Manzini...."

Also, be sure to include dates after major works the artist did, to give the reader a time frame of when he completed the works in his career.

For the subsection "Santa Maria.." If you are referring to the same altarpiece, have the sentences flow a bit more.

"Andrea worked with Masaccio in 1426 on the altarpiece for the Carmine Church in Pisa, painting the panels of its pradella with the Legend of St. Julian and the Charity of St. Nicholas.[2] He also contributed to painting the central panel of the altarpiece, titled the Madonna and Child with Angels (you can link this without the additional parentheses), now located at the National Gallery. [MORE INFO]"

Under Sales at Auction "The painting exemplifies the influence Fra Angelico had on Andrea later in [his] career."

These are very nit-picky edits. You have the pieces down which is great, if you could just find additional background on those as well as some of his biographical information and a timeline of his maturity as an artist, you'll be set! Good job.

Johnmcmichael (talk) 18:06, 7 March 2017 (UTC)