User talk:Grierson.k/sandbox

What does the article (or section) do well? What changes would you suggest overall? What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know!

1. I think that Katherine does a very thorough job in really looking at the existing article and trying to add whatever she thinks is missing, but is still pertinent and should be added. The addition of the "evolutionary aspects" section is interesting and I think gives a lot more insight on a perspective that otherwise would be untouched on this article.

2. Some hyperlinks could be added, such as with the word 'symphysiotomy' or even 'Caesarean section', as it would help the article flow better if other references could be added. It also seems to me that the Epidemiology section is so short, that it might be better served to get rid of it as a section and just put it into the introduction, but that's definitely just a suggestion.

3. Again, just adding the hyperlinks would be my biggest suggestion. Other than that, the work done is very thorough and well thought out.

4. Katherine's work pushes me to look more at what's missing from the article as a whole. I might want to add more studies done in order to make my work more comprehensive. Overall, she's putting a lot of effort and thought into this and I'm excited to read it when it's done!

Beiyulin (talk) 01:16, 30 October 2018 (UTC)Beiyu Lin

1. Does well: Very well researched overall. It drew analyses that I have never thought of before, such as the evolutionary reason that obstructed labor it unique to humans.

2. Perhaps Improve: I would expand upon the Evolutionary Aspects heading. It's a very interesting idea, and I've never thought about it that way. Maybe cite more findings from articles that explain this topic? Also I would explain further the Symphysiotomy procedure you mention.

3. Biggest thing to improve: Main thing is to talk about symphysiotomy more. Perhaps expand more about the advantages of the procedure over the more common Cesaerean section.

4. One thing I could learn from your article is giving a more comprehensive view of my topic. While your article needs more development in the subsections, it definitely hits on all the important general (from what I can tell) of the topic.

giaclagraff (talk) 21:50, 29 October 2018 (EST)Justin LaGraff