User talk:GrostoTwig/sandbox

Peer Review: Microbiomeman (talk) Evan
 * A lot of run on sentences in the later part of the paper that can be cleaned up.
 * More why its important and its use in society in the start of the page
 * Potentially add more images. What alumina looks like. And an image of what it looks like in its end product use.
 * I agree with cleaning up the equations will be helpful -- I like how you did it
 * Linking other pages within your page may also be helpful
 * I do think as you mentioned that splitting up the info will be helpful -- going from the regulations, and problems with the Bayer process? Major companies maybe that you use it?

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 * The history section of the original article should probably come before the process section (maybe? seems logical to me)
 * Look about re-formatting the chemical equations so they're more visually appealing (appropriate? laid out better?)
 * What is a pressure vessel? Is it worth explaining the setup of the vessel?
 * Are there any other environmental incidents/news stories besides the Danube River Incident you mentioned? If you can find multiple, it may warrant its own subsection titled "Public Incidents" or "Threats to Environment" or something (you get the picture)
 * A section on relevance?! Why is this process so important? What industries use this method and what sorts of consumer products come out of this process? The article intro says it's a step towards refining aluminum metal but I feel like the subject deserves more than a one-sentence explanation.
 * The original article looks like it's lacking some links to other Wikipedia articles. One that I spotted right away was "supersaturated solution," which strikes me as a term that should be linked to the Wikipedia article for supersaturated solutions. Another that should probably be linked is "metallurgy."

Freeman.all (talk) 20:48, 30 March 2018 (UTC)