User talk:Gstock1/sandbox

Hi George! Overall, I think these editions are really good for your wiki page, and well communicated. I really like that you integrated the topics we learned in the classroom into your topic but presented them in ways that were comprehensive and understandable for a reader who may be encountering this topic for the first time. One note: I think there could be a little more elaboration on citation 4. Introducing the topic of foreplay in marital advice literature caught my eye and I feel that adding a few details could strengthen this feature even more. Another very minor thing I have is to just try to condense some of the lengthier sentences; nothing wrong with the content itself here, just a minor grammatical change. Finally, I ultimately think its wise that you made sure to note that foreplay is unique, ambiguous, and personal to everyone, noting that there is not one definition for the act. You acknowledge the misconceptions about the topic and in return follow with important information. Looks great.Mxrlena (talk) 20:01, 13 November 2019 (UTC)