User talk:Gtarazi/sandbox

I like that you have a lot of info and resources/citations. Everything is clear and understandable. I would just take out the "Abstract" header and leave that content as a standalone, intro paragraph. Other than that, awesome job. --RJCMorgan (talk) 23:52, 14 November 2019 (UTC)

You did a great job explaining and hitting the major features. However, I would suggest reorganizing your work. Possible changes could include less wording in a paragraph style and more bullet points with shorter explanations in order to be more concise. I would eliminate the percentages in signs/symptoms as I thought it could be confusing and restructure your abstract to reflect a summary of the disease without giving away so much information. You're off to a great start.--Dhouston04 (talk) 12:40, 15 November 2019 (UTC)

--Sweiner02 (talk) 20:50, 6 December 2019 (UTC)
 * Mechanism: what about connections to other causes? There are a number of causes, and there is some work on some of them.
 * Glad to see that you have added citations to the section with that comment.
 * What about prognosis for other causes?
 * Missing recent research.