User talk:H.speedy/sandbox

Peer Review by Adriana Emanuilova
Below are my peer review notes -

I think that adding more information from a source that Wikipedia editors have already used is a great idea. I would suggest finding other sources that can back up the same information so you are not stretching one source too much.

Peer Review by Kristen King
I like that you included multiple sources to edit your article. You're off to a great start! I would expand more on your topic and dig deeper into the topic. The last comment I have is just to make sure you are including in-text-citations when incorporating your info in your article.

Peer Review by Kaela Cardarella
My Peer Review Notes: I think your article is off to a great start! I feel though that since this is an encyclopedia type of article, your content may need to be backed up by statistics and or facts. I think it is organized well though. I feel like some of the sentences in the beginning were a little awkward and ran on a lot. Maybe consider some sentence reconstruction. Over all however, I think this is a great subject and a good start. Cant wait to see it all come together!

Respond to Peer Review
Thank you for the feedback on our draft! I agree that everything in the article needs to have an in-text citation. I also think that it is important to use a few different sources to construct the draft of the article. I am going to go over the sentences I wrote and try to reword them in a way that makes more sense. Thank you for your review!H.speedy (talk) 20:03, 27 March 2018 (UTC)Hannah

I definitely agree that we need statistics for this topic! I have been trying to find some, but even just the sources for this topic I think are hard to find. I tend to find many blog posts/sources I am not sure are reliable. Thank you for your input! — Preceding unsigned comment added by 199.193.59.209 (talk) 13:30, 28 March 2018 (UTC)