User talk:HTSCHRE/sandbox

I think this a great start to your Wikipedia article. The overall tone of this lead paragraph is encyclopedic and provides a good overview of Rea Tajiri as a person and as a director. I think you could expand more upon her Asian American identity and background. Also about her career as a director. In your outline you write that you plan to do this so it seems you are on track. (Sami)

Good start. At this point, I think you can start to turn the things you plan to write about into finished product. (Joel) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jvarne (talk • contribs) 17:30, 16 April 2018 (UTC)

Professor Schreiber feedback
Haley - Is the lead paragraph in your sandbox the draft that you meant for people to review? If so, this is somewhat limited at this point and I would have expected you to be a bit further along. Could you let me know if your draft is elsewhere? MJSProf (talk) 18:21, 15 April 2018 (UTC)