User talk:Haileychamberlain/sandbox

Sentence structure
One thought I had was to change up the sentence structure a bit so fewer sentences begin with "The Matter of Seggri". As is, it's very clear, so this would just be a cosmetic change to mix up the dynamics a bit. Naomiwright (talk) 19:16, 30 November 2013 (UTC)

Citation formatting
Wikipedia's format for citations places the reference outside the punctuation. Naomiwright (talk) 19:30, 30 November 2013 (UTC)

Austin's peer edits
Hi, Hailey! Excellent work on these two pages! Really interesting stuff.

The Matter of Seggri:

- Is there a difference between “novelette” and “novella?” I might argue that this one is more like a short story than either, but I think the word “novelette” is problematic.

- You’ve made the information about publishing come first, when really it’s less important than what the story is about.

- If I were you, I might break out the five pieces of the narrative out into a list. (This is how I did it on my pages: Help:List)

- For both “The Matter of Seggri” and “Nine Lives,” don’t forget to include Categories for each of your pages, once you’ve established them. (I mean like adding “Category:Hainish Cycle” or “Category:Nebula Award Nominees” to the ends of your articles)

Nine Lives

- Again, you jump right into talking about the publishing history of the story instead of what it’s about. I’d rearrange your info so that the summary comes before the publishing history. (Although it’s really interesting stuff, super good to have in there.)

I’ve got to commend you on starting new articles—I did the same, and it’s not easy! Nice work.

AustinP.503 (talk) 07:08, 2 December 2013 (UTC)